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Craved appearances that
Others around always had
Vitiating me
i
c
Eventually
There is nothing left but the
Steady longing for
©2009 ~cxsankh
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For =Mattiello 's contest. I tried. I usually never pay attention to meters (I'm not much of a poet), but I tried here.

It's an Acrostic Haiku, created by =Mattiello himself.

Tell me if you get the concept, or if it seems like a bunch of jumbled words.

I might try another one, they're kind of fun

Uses 5-7-5 instead of 3-5-3

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~MissFreak May 31, 2009, 11:06:59 AM
I like this one too but i think i like the other one better...although this is really good too! :)

--
-you do me harm
-too bad my dear, deal with it! what does not kill you makes you stronger
-do you want to kill me?
-no, i want to make you stronger
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~scheherazadenerai Jun 2, 2009, 8:39:30 AM
Reading it again, is it about you wanting to be as socially confident as everyone else, or at least wanting to appear as socially confident as everyone else, even though you know their confidence is just a facade?

Did you leave the end cut off deliberately? Since I guess that leaves the reader longing for more too. Very clever. :)

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~cxsankh Jun 2, 2009, 11:06:31 AM
It's about wanting to be like everyone else to the point where your longing effects everything else about you, sort of. I suppose. I'm not good at describing the inspiration for my poetry. xD

Yup. There were certain rules for how to write the poem... if you had a six letter word, you'd have 2 stanzas... they're a bit complicated, but if you're interested, I could think them. =Mattiello came up with the format/rules.
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~scheherazadenerai Jun 4, 2009, 3:27:02 PM
It is an interesting idea! Good exercise too. I think it brought out something different in you. Not sure if I could try it myself since I've still got to find out a way to finish my latest chapter lol!

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